Corrections for Scars from galleys:
Page VIII:
Last sentence at end of the second full paragraph it reads now:
‘The revelation for the audience was going to be that the two settings,
fantasy and cyberpunk, where the past and future of our current world.”’
Correction: where to were.
‘The revelation for the audience was going to be that the two settings,
fantasy and cyberpunk, were the past and future of our current world.’
Page VIII, next sentence:
‘The first draft of Scars arrived and Caroline provided that I had not
misplaced my trust in her.’
Correction: provided changed to proved.
‘The first draft of Scars arrived and Caroline proved that I had not
misplaced my trust in her.’
Page IX:
1st full paragraph – 5th sentence:
'Then, after those two novels where released, the decision was made ...’
Correction: where to were.
‘Then, after those two novels were released, the decision was made ...’
Page IX
Two sentences later:
‘Strangely enough French translations of both Scars and the second
novel (Little Treasures) were published.’
Correction: comma needs to be inserted after Strangely enough,
‘Strangely enough, French translations of both Scars and the second
novel (Little Treasures) were published.’
Page IX
Next to last sentence:
‘It took twelve years . . . . Scars has finally emerged.’
Correction: Scars isn’t italicized.
‘It took twelve years . . . . Scars has finally emerged.’
Page 21:
5th full paragraph, 1st sentence:
Aina hadn’t thought about her mother in years.,but here was her mother’s
face’
Correction: eliminate extra comma and capitalize B.
‘Aina hadn’t thought about her mother in years. But here . . .’
Page 25:
2nd paragraph, 2nd sentence
‘Javan had noticed a tension building in her, her expression one of
dread, as if . . .’
Correction: period after first her. Capitalize second her. Insert
correct verb “was” in second sentance
‘Javan had noticed a tension building in her. Her expression was one of
dread, as if . . .’
Page 26:
5th full paragraph, 2nd sentence
‘A murmur ran through the room, and Javan wondered if there were bad
blood . . .’
Correction: were to was
‘A murmur ran through the room, and Javan wondered if there was bad
blood . . .’
Page 32
7th paragraph, 1st sentence:
‘She didn’t reply and for a moment . . .’
Correction: insert comma after reply
‘She didn’t reply, and for a moment . . .’
Page 44
4th full paragraph, 4th sentence
‘Beatrice’s arms and legs were splayed out at unnatural angles and her
torso was twisted to one side.’
Correction: Insert comma between “angles” and “and”
‘Beatrice’s arms and legs were splayed out at unnatural angles, and her
torso was twisted to one side.’
Page 49
10th full paragraph, 3rd sentence
'Tell me this: when did you first kill someone?’
Correction: after the colon, the “w” should be capitalized “W”
‘Tell me this: When did you first kill someone?’
Page 71
4th sentence, 1st sentence
‘He shoved at Aina roughly with his foot.’
Correction: delete “at”
‘He shoved Aina roughly with his foot.’
Page 77
2nd full paragraph, 3rd sentence
‘She tried to tell herself that it was his thief magic which made him
pass through . . .’
Correction: change “which” to “that”
‘She tried to tell herself that it was his thief magic that made him
pass through . . .’
Page 81
3rd full paragraph, 1st sentence
‘Rising from the forest floor were six enormous trees which formed the
core . . .’
Correction: “which” to “that”
‘Rising from the forest floor were six enormous trees that formed the
core . . .’
Page 83
1st paragraph, 3rd sentence
‘Why am I crying?’
Correction: sentence is Aina’s question to herself and needs to be
italicized
‘Why am I crying?’
Page 83
3rd paragraph, 2nd and 3rd sentences
‘How peculiar it was to see Alachia through adult eyes. In Aina’s memory
. . .’
Correction: there should be a paragraph break between these two sentences
‘How peculiar it was to see Alachia through adult eyes. In Aina’s memory
. . .’
Page 143
5th paragraph
‘“Yes,” he replied. “I haven’t spent much time on-board any ship.”’
Correction: on-board should be two words on board
‘“Yes,” he replied. “I haven’t spent much time on board any ship.”’
Page 159
3rd paragraph, 2nd sentence
‘The sounds of the crew settling down for the evening drifted around him
until at last they grew silent’
Correction: comma between “until” and “at” and comma between “last” and
“they”
‘The sounds of the crew settling down for the evening drifted around him
until, at last, they grew silent’
Page 169
11th paragraph, 5th sentence
‘No sign that she had plunged them into an inferno of fire and pain.’
Correction: “had” needs to be changed to “has” – this section is in
present tense
‘No sign that she has plunged them into an inferno of fire and pain.’
Page 187
4th paragraph, 3rd sentence
‘The Therans offer was simple: they would show the elves how to build .
. .’
Correction: after “simple: they”—the “t” in “they” should be upper case
– and Therans should have an apostrophe to indicate possessive
‘The Therans’ offer was simple: They would show the elves how to build .
. .’
Page 190
1st paragraph, 3rd sentence
‘Aina liked this, hanging suspended in the sky – neither here nor there
just waiting . . .’
Correction: insert comma between “there” and “just”
‘Aina liked this, hanging suspended in the sky – neither here nor there,
just waiting . . .’
Page 203
8th paragraph, 3rd sentence
‘But he knew this pain; it was familiar.’
Correction: insert period after pain,”I” in “it” should be capitalized
‘But he knew this pain. It was familiar.’
Page 209
1st full paragraph, 5th sentence
‘Maybe if she just lay down and slept . . .’
Correction: no ellipses after “slept”
‘Maybe if she just lay down and slept.’
Page 215
2nd paragraph, 1st sentence
‘“Vulnerable?” Sidra laughed, a high choked sound. “ She’s as vulnerable
as a dragon. . . .”’
Correction: space between second set of quotes and “She’s” needs to be
removed.
‘“Vulnerable?” Sidra laughed, a high choked sound. “She’s as vulnerable
as a dragon. . . .”’
Page 219
14th paragraph, 5th sentence
‘“Most name-givers can take only so much before they give up, but not
you.’
Correction: period after up, upper case “B” on “but”
‘“Most name-givers can take only so much before they give up. But not
you.”’
Page 221
2nd paragraph, 1st sentence
‘When she realized what she’d . . .’
Correction: add And to beginning of sentence, “When” changed to “when”
‘And when she realized what she’s . . .’
Page 221
6th paragraph, 3rd sentence
‘But it doesn’t hurt with physical pain: it feels like something . . .’
Correction: “it”, “I” needs to be upper case
‘But it doesn’t hurt with physical pain: It feels like something . . .’
Page 224
5th paragraph, 2nd sentence
‘“Your name.” It is a command.’
Correction: 2nd sentence should be a separate paragraph
‘“Your name.”
It is a command.’
Page 255
1st paragraph, 4th sentence
‘“There was a way she had about her . . . whenever she was around you
felt you were home.”’
Correction: remove ellipses, insert period after “her”, “w” in
“whenever” should be upper case.
‘“There was a way she had about her. Whenever she was around you felt
you were home.”’
Page 260
7th full paragraph, 4th sentence
‘While they giggled over whispered secrets . . .’
Correction: change “they” to “they’d”
‘While they’d giggled over whispered secrets . . .’
Page 271
3rd paragraph, 4th sentence
‘She would lose Aithne there, she was sure of it.’
Correction: comma splice, should be two separate sentences
‘She would lose Aithne there. She was sure of it.’
Page 274
7th paragraph, 1st sentence
“Losing me . . .”
Correction: There’s an extra space before the first letter in the first
sentence
Page 275
4th paragraph, 1st sentence
‘He looked ...’
Correction: There’s an extra space before the first letter in the first
sentence
Page 279
1st paragraph, 1st sentence
‘Transfixed . . .’
Correction: There’s an extra space before the first letter in the first
sentence
Page 280
1st paragraph, 2nd sentence
‘This one was not as large as the first, but also held wondrous crystals
and long tapered rock formations.’
Correction: insert comma between “long” and “tapered”
‘This one was not as large as the first, but also held wondrous crystals
and long, tapered rock formations.’
Page 284
2nd paragraph, 1st sentence
‘“And he offered me something he knew I wanted: immortality.”’
Correction: after colon, “I” in immortality should be upper case
‘“And he offered me something he knew I wanted: Immortality.”’
Page 284
9th paragraph, 1st sentence
‘“You see,” she said, her voice bitter.’
Correction: deleted comma and insert period after said. “H” in “her”
upper case, add verb was.
‘“You see,” she said. Her voice was bitter.’
Page 292
5th paragraph, 1st sentence
‘And still the love went on.’
Correction: extra space at beginning of sentence
Page 292
9th paragraph, last sentence
‘Then, just as suddenly as it appeared, the light vanished.’
Correction: This sentence should be a separate paragraph.
Page 292
11th paragraph, 2nd sentence
‘ – flowing thick and viscous down her arm, across her hands, dripping
to the ground.’
Correction: change “ground” to “snow”
‘ – flowing thick and viscous down her arm, across her hands, dripping
to the snow.’